Things i need to improve in my short film

As i have been editing the first draft of my short film i have come across issues i need to address in time for my second draft.

These include:

  • Need to re shot first shot of protagonist opening the laptop – camera needs to be straighter
  • 3rd shot needs re shot – out of focus
  • Scrolling through social media feed needs to be re shot
  • Get ups from sofa needs to be shot
  • Need protagonist to write status “Great Saturday” – contrast with previous shots.
  • Need long shot of him in field running
  • Need medium shot of him taking a selfie
  • Need to shorten the shot of him going to the car
  • Show actually pictures of food he’s making
  • Show audience that its a ready meal
  • Protagonist waiting for ready meal shot needs to be longer
  • Social media likes going up on screen needs to be added in.
  • Re do shot of phone in focus – camera needs to be still.
  • Need to add in all the caption – can make these on after effects.
  • Speed up sequence needs to have more footage
  • Score needs to be edited more in time with the footage.
  • Need to finish filming the scenes I don’t have yet.



Evaluation questions

  • In what ways does your media product use, develop or challenge forms and conventions of real media products?

Things to think about 

  • What genre does your media product belong to?
  • What are the key concepts you used from this genre?
  • How do you know these are the key aspects to the genre (T.A research)
  • What films inspired or influenced you? (initial research)
  • What generic codes did you develop or challenge (planning)
  • Your presentation of Stereotypes & representation?
  • Why did you decide to develop or challenge this area?
  • What was your desired impact on the audience?
  • Were you successful? (T.A Feedback)
  • Link to narrative theorists
  • Link to audience theory
  • Audio
  • Typography
  • Shot types, camera angles and camera movement
  • Mise en scene
  • Editing


How effective is the combination of your main and ancillary texts

things to think about

Evaluate each media text:

    1. Strengths
    2. Weaknesses
    3. Challenges
    4. Future improvements
  • Discuss conventions you utilised or challenged and explain if they were effective
  • What was the main aim for each text?
  • Were you able to achieve the desired outcome across all three media text?
  • Justify how synergy has been created across all thee media text.


  • What have you learnt from your audience feedback? 

Things to think about

  • Comment on initial stages of Target Audience research – explain how it influenced or inspired your decision making and the planning process.
  • Analyse feedback from the first draft version of the edit & each ancillary.
  • Highlight the benefit of using different forms of feedback (questionnaires, focus group, online survey, interview, screenings e.c.t)
  • Analyse feedback received for final media & ancillary texts in detail
  • Explain changes & adaptions made based on feedback received.
  • Evaluate effectiveness of feedback and your media texts (positive / negative outcome?)
  • Did any of your feedback surprise you?
  • Summarise your response to overall feedback
  • How might you approach the task differently in the future?


  • How did you use new media technology in the construction and research, planning and evaluation stages?

Things to think about 

You can talk through your work in a chronological order and comment on the effectiveness of each technology or you can break it down into sections for example:

  • Research
  • Planning
  • Construction
  • Evaluation

The main aim is to highlight the range of new technologies that you adopted and comment on its effectiveness and benefit to you.

Ancillary text (poster)

short film poster image

This is the image I am thinking about using for my ancillary text. I really like this image as its powerful and just from this one image you can tell  what my short film is going to be about. The phone wrapping around his arm going into his DNA is a metaphor that the phone is becoming part of him and it is attached to him all the time.

I think I am going to have the title of my film on the phone screen. The idea I am most keen on calling my film so far is “A Farcry From Reality”.

Independent post: 4th wall

The 4th wall is an expression stemming from the world of theater. In most modern theater design, a room will consist of three physical walls, as well as a an imaginary fourth that serves to separate the world of the characters from that of the audience. This wall is broken when the when the product becomes aware of the audience. This can happen when if the character looks straight into the camera or talks to the audience acknowledging their presences.

An example of this is in “Deadpool” where character Deadpool consistently talks to the audience or at the very end of “The Revenant” where the protagonist looks dead straight into the camera to acknowledge the audience.

Reasons for breaking the 4th wall is because If the fourth wall is the rule, and it’s broken by specific choice at specific times, then it breaks up the audience’s investment in the play. If the director wants the audience to listen to the argument of the film rather than get invested in its emotional story, breaking the fourth wall is a way to ensure this.

It can also be used to implicate the audience. If a character murders another character, then looks right at the audience and addresses them, then the audience is implicated as people who watched a murder and did nothing. This choice is often made in social issues theatre, where they want the audience to shake off their complacency regarding some issue in the world.

A great example of breaking the 4th wall is “House of Cards”. We watch Frank Underwood do terrible things to people that we like much more than him, but we cheer for him while he does it because he talks to us. He helps us understand why he’s doing it. Kevin Spacey, who plays role, talks about how the camera or the audience is his ‘best friend’, he casts us as the only person he trusts, and we, subconsciously, don’t want to betray that trust.

For my short film i am going to break the 4th wall at the very end then it cuts to black and the credits. I want to break the 4th wall as it is a symbol for my protagonist coming back to reality as he leaves this fake social media life and goes out to the real world and breaking the 4th is the best way to acknowledge this as the audience represent the real world.


Research post: different sound effects i will use.


The use of sound effects in film is highly important. It adds a sense or realism to your product and also gives each shot more depth.

One sound effect I will use a lot in my short film is the sound of typing.

sound effects


There are many royalty free typing sounds I can use. This sound will be used when my protagonist has just uploaded a picture to social media and is typing the caption. Furthermore i will use it in the scene when he is out with his friends at a restaurant and the camera is tracking over everyone shoulder and the typing sound will be getting louder as the camera goes over their shoulder one by one.




sound effect 2


Another sound I will use is the sound of alerts or pop ups for when my protagonist  gets notification on his social media. This sound will reinforce how connected he is with social media.







sound effects 1


I will use the sound of birds in the running scene. This will establish a new location from the start of the film but also because the scene is outdoor in a woodland environment it gives it more depth of realism. It also changes the tone of the film of having a natural sound with it mainly having machinery noises.





sound effects 3


Furthermore in this scene the protagonist splashes water over his face to make it look like he’s been working hard and sweating. I need a quick quiet to noise to support the shot.






I will also use the sound of button clicks as it adds a deeper sense of realism when the protagonist is on his phone and laptop on social media.

sound effects 2


Independent post: Colour correction editing.


The video above it a tutorial of how to edit the colour of your footage in premier. This will be helpful to me as it means I can tweak my footage colour if I want a shot to be darker or more lighter based on the way my protagonist is feeling in that scene.

The video make it look fairly simple and the shots afterwards look very effective so I hope for the same results with my shots. It will give my short film a cinematic finish and over all professional look so hopefully my film won’t look like a basic student film.



This is my animatic. I made it on IMovie. Obviously its a rough interception of what the shots I will include and the score I will use, however the score might not play through out the whole of the film, there might be instances where it cuts out and gets quieter or louder in scenes.

Also there will be scenes where I use sound effects such as typing etc but this is not included in the animatic.

Script improved 3

This is my third improvement to my script. I have added location of each scene and also the lighting and if there are any key  details in the scene such as clothing.

Research post: Importance of Mise en scene.

Mise en scene includes the arrangement of the scenery, props, lighting, actors facial behavior, clothing, ethnicity and class status.

The fact my short film has no dialogue makes the importance of the mise en scene even greater as what the character is feeling relies purely on the mise en scene in that shot.

How I will use mis en scene to tell the audience how the main character is feeling in each shot is mainly through over dramatic facial expression and also through lighting. What i plan to do with the lighting is to make it really high key when he is living through his digital , social media self and to contrast the lighting when he is living his normal, boring real life as low-key. These will be the main two forms of mise en scene i will use to present the audience the way the protagonist is feeling , however i will incorporate other forms such as props and clothing where i can.

Below is a good video showing all the different types of mise en scene forms used in films.


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